Fifty Words Story Collaboration: In the Distance

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I saw it there in the distance. A streak of luminescence in an otherwise dismal world. I  hungered for it; staring unblinking. It moved closer—that brilliant glow. Holding out my hand, I touched the edge of his collar. It was then I realized, the light came from his soul.

Our eyes met, and as his hand folded gently over my own. I felt a pleasurable prickling sensation race over the surface of my skin. He must have noticed me shudder. His eyes sparkled as he smiled in the dim.

“You were alone before?” he asked.

I nodded.

“So was I, once. All alone. But no longer.” He gestured beyond where we stood. In the near darkness, I could discern the silhouettes of a mass of people, silently rising and falling like driftwood in a soft tide that seemed to reach to the horizon.

“Who are they?” I asked. “I…I can’t see…”

His hold on my hand tightened, then clamped down like the jaws of a rabid dog. I  screamed as the prickling sensation bloomed into the heat of an undying torch. His inner light glowed brighter and brighter until I could see a crowd surging towards us; a wave of human torment breaking at our feet.

In an untold number of unseeing eyes, I could see myself, writhing in the chaotic misery I’d inflicted on others in my life time.

“I don’t want to see!” I pleaded.

“You have to see,” Lucifer replied. “And I have to help you. I am the Light Bringer.”

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50 Word Story Collaboration

By  Na trioblóidi & Rose Perez

Oglach expanded Rose’s Fifty Words Story, In the Distance

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Published by Dead Donovan

SlasherMonster Magazine

26 thoughts on “Fifty Words Story Collaboration: In the Distance

  1. Thank you, Rose for allowing me to expand your incredible fifty word story. It’s the first time I’ve ever tried anything like that and it was an honour. Matt and yourself always come up with the best ideas. Great image for the story, too.
    On another note, I think Tonks can read my mind, which is incredibly disturbing for both of us.

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          1. It really speaks to what you and FTM have done with SMM that so many talented people read and contribute. It’s a great communal spirit, everyone benefits. Matthew Tonks also promotes a lot of talented writers and artists on his site. It’s a great thing to see writers and artists helping one another and having fun.

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  2. Exceptional.
    Well done Oglach.
    A brilliant expansion on
    Rose’s wonderful 50 word story.
    Amazing imagery.

    And the accompanying graphics
    are really very very good, Fly / Rose.
    Gimme a break people.
    I’m covering all bases here. 😎

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  3. Loved the story. You know the word “slashing” brings a smile to my face, don’t you? I didn’t see the twist at the end but I saw the clues woven into the story after rereading. Very interesting twist on “light bringer.” I don’t suppose we can handle the truth, can we? Happy slashing! xo

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      1. I’m very flattered, thank you. I felt they might have been quite depressing. I’m working on one at the moment, which I feel is a bit dark so I appreciate the invitation. Let me polish it up and see what happens. xo

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  4. “I could discern the silhouettes of a mass of people, silently rising and falling like driftwood in a soft tide that seemed to reach to the horizon.” — A well crafted line, and it induces vivid mental imagery!

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    1. Hi Mich! Thank you for reading the story. The first paragraph is my fifty words story, which Oglach expanded on, and that’s where it morphs into dazzling imageries of light, sufferings, realization, and guilt. Very chilling and yes, one hell of an ending. Thanks again for your words, and please consider submitting a dark poem or story to SMM. 👻

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      1. I honestly suck at short stories..my opening is usually strong then i cant find my way of ending it.that’s why whenever i try one and ask my grown up kids to read it they will say..”that’s it???”….nevetheless i will try though…

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